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idealflaw's picture
Seattle
Nov 2002
4 years ago

I hope this song is interpreted with a bit of a sense of humor, and not some sort of venom that isn't there..

This song is called "now that you're dead I can finally love you". I don't really have a muse these days so I want to bounce this off of someone who might be interested or insightful. Just curious if it's not too mean-sounding. I'm not really a monster, it's quite fictional, but you could perhaps think of it as a failed relationship... and the way time tends to hide the rough edges.

(verse 1)
It is with great regret that I am informed
Of a lightning flash, it was a terrible storm that took you.
And it quietly struck me, that we're finally through.
Beneath the trunk of a tree, oh it must have been shocking.

When I got the news, I admitt I cried
perhaps a tear or maybe two.
Is that normal? What am I supposed to do?
Well I hopped a train and dragged the streets
The City life is where you'll find --- me,
Browsing in department stores. That is how I like to mourn.

(chorus)
Now that you're dead, I can finally love you
I'll remember the good times, even though they were few
Now that you're gone, I think I actually like you.
Maybe Romantasize you. Or perhaps Devillianize you.

(verse 2)
It takes time, I'm told, to shake the old and move on.
Well how long?
Because I'm feeling fine and I have for some time, and I'm tired
of pretending i'm sad.
Don't get me wrong, don't misconstrue, don't mistake my haste as distaste for you
Because I care. I really did care. At least I think so.
But it's been over three weeks, and boredom's gotten to me,
The misfortune is yours, but when can I leave?

(chorus)
Now that you're dead, I can finally love you
I'll remember the good times, even though they were few
Now that you're gone, I think I actually like you.
Maybe Romantasize you. Or perhaps Devillianize you.

patlang12's picture
Bay Area
Jul 2003
10 years ago

I don't think it sounds too mean.

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idealflaw's picture
Seattle
Nov 2002
4 years ago

i must say that in squeezing these lyrics into a song format, there will be some major surgery and truncating involved. but the general theme remains the same.

Loser's picture
Texas
Oct 2003
10 years ago

I like it, especially the chorus. It does have a biting quality to it, kinda like some of John Lennon songs did.

scarr's picture
Space City, TX
Jul 2004
9 years ago

I was wondering where it was going as I was reading the first verse, but the chorus really tied it all in and drove home a really unusual but comprehendable idea -- which is the mark of a great chorus. ;)

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d_y_l_o_n's picture
Canada
Sep 2003
10 years ago

I like it all except for the word Devillianize. Perhaps hearing it with vocal melody would change that, but it disrupts the previously strong flow.

Just my two cents.

SantaCruzMack's picture
Santa Cruz, Cali
Mar 2004
8 years ago

"Demonize" might work. but thats my opinion

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scarr's picture
Space City, TX
Jul 2004
9 years ago

Originally posted by SantaCruzMack
"Demonize" might work. but thats my opinion

I think that's the opposite of what he's going for.

"And if you go, furious angels will bring you back to me" - Rob Dougan

idealflaw's picture
Seattle
Nov 2002
4 years ago

Originally posted by scarr
I think that's the opposite of what he's going for.

exactly. it's like saying "now that you're dead, your not such a bitch" if you read between the lines..

this song is wordy and when i put it to music, much of this will hit the editing floor. like a movie, you know?

i'm not a very confident lyricist but i really try to try, anyway. i'm glad you guys are picking up on it!

now if i could just find a singer besides myself!

gottajibboo's picture
lawrence, kansas
Aug 2003
4 years ago

great concept. i love songs that make you think of things you may not want to. you could bring the humor up a bit by changing that one part to "...it's been over a week..." :p instead of three.

sabbath181's picture
Massachusettes
Aug 2003
10 years ago

I don't liek how alot of it doesnt ryhme...it makes it hard for me to sing it doesnt sound so good maytbe you have a way of singing the unmatched words to make them sound in a ryhming manner but over all i think its good, seems to be more of a poem then a song tho IMO

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